Abigor knew that if she did not lock them away that they would be free to escape and disappear, taking with them their children that she so desperately wanted.
For many years Anya and Ameathon remained locked away in the kingdom's dungeon, giving birth to seven children. Though Abigor wanted a child she was never pleased and so she would send them away.
Anya and Ameathon were once again expecting a child and they grew weary and dreaded the birth for they knew that Abigor would yet again take their baby from them. Time passed and the time for Anya to give birth arrived. This night seemed special though, for outside there was fierce storm surrounding the kingdom's walls. Within the dungeon wall's Anya and Ameathon welcomed their new baby Arianrhod. Fearful that the following day Abigor would take Arianrhod they devised a plan to escape. Ameathon and Anya were able to break free form the dungeon's gates, cradling Arianhrod in Ameathon's arms they made their way past the sleeping guards. Walking out into the howling winds and rain they knew that they must act fast to get their sleeping child to safety. They followed a snake for they had an overwhelming since of trust in this snake. Approaching the Three Sister's Rivers they saw the banks flooding and knew that they must find a way to pass. As Ameathon and Anya began to grow weary and lose hope they noticed that the snake had turned himself into a raft and they hopped on. Once on the other side of the river they continued their journey to Ameathon's cousin's house where they knew Arianrhod would be safe and looked after. Finally they arriving at Ameathon's cousin's house they were able to get a better look at Arianhrod and they rejoiced for she held the signs of retribution in her hands.
Author's Notes: The original outline of the story comes from Cradle Tales of Hinduism by Sister Nivedita (1907). The characters have been adapted from the original story of the Birth of Krishna and are deities from other mythologies. In the original story Vasudeva (the father) has to cross the Jumna River with Krishna, in this version Ameathon has to cross the Three Sister's River with Arianhrod, my idea for naming the river comes from Irelands five longest rivers. In Krishna's birth story only Vasudeva goes on the journey with Krishna, leaving Krishna's mother behind. Krishna is placed in Nanda's home and Vasudeva returns to the dungeon with the baby girl that Nanda had found; she then turns into a goddess and disappears.
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ReplyDeleteI really found this story super interesting and almost wish you had written more! I am thinking that this is the story I will be reading for this coming week or maybe some extra credit. I thought it was a really cool use of the snake turning himself into the life raft when that could have been so dangerous because of the supposed dangers behind the snake. I really liked this and I cannot wait to see what else you will be doing!
You do a great job by starting off the story and providing lots of detail to set up the setting and the premise of the whole story. You have a great talent when writing stories and i was definitely hooked from the beginning. I liked how you made the story go over time and it was not a one day event. Was the snake a god? and what happened to the other children? Overall i really liked the story but i would have also like to know what happens after they escape, does their child turn into a god? and do they reconnect with all their other children? Providing answers to these questions would help create more depth and length in the story if you are wanting to make it longer. but overall i really enjoyed it and have not read anything like it thus far!
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ReplyDeleteYou did a great job setting up the scene and Abigor. At first I felt sad for her and then she did some terrible things. And then when Ameathon and Anya escaped, I could feel the anxiety radiating off the page. You're very good at capturing your characters emotions!
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ReplyDeleteThis story was very interesting to me. You did a great job at setting up the story with the amount of details you included. Unlike many other stories I read, you were able to grab my attention from the beginning and drew me to want to read more and more! I look forward to reading your future stories!
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You are so creative and good at writing. I like how you started the story. Starting the story is the hardest part for me because the beginning of the story must be interesting to get other peoples interest. I was into the story from the beginning. I hope to read more of your stories because I really enjoyed it. Good luck!
Hey Nicole! I love the happy ending of your story! I think it would be really entertaining to read more about the scene where Anya and Ameathon escaped from Abigor. What was the plan that got them out of the dungeon's snake. Also, I would love to know what Abigor was looking for in her ideal child. What was it about the first seven children that made them so undesirable to her that she sent them away?
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this story and loved the happy ending of this story. This really showed off how creative you are and your writing skills. It was very easy to get invested in this story right from the beginning. I am looking forward to getting to read more of your stories this semester.
Hello Nicole! I really liked your story! When I read the story the story in the Mahabharata I was so upset that she would kill her babies. Your story was good and I could feel how upset they must have been to keep losing their children. I am glad that they were able to escape and take at least one of their children with them.
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